Bastian Schweinsteiger
Bastian Schweinsteiger is football player. He is my
favorite athlete. He is tall and
white skin. He has short blond hair.
He
plays football. He has won more than 40
award for football.
I
like him because He is the leader and play
football very well.
His
position is midfielder. He was captain of the German national team and ever won UEFA Best Player in Europe Award in 2013.
- more than 40 award (หลายรางวัล เติม s)
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